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Post by Casperf1 on Jul 12, 2014 2:36:07 GMT
I rly like this. The style I get from it seems very... Cyberpunky? I don't think that's the word, either way, I love the character and world. Plz finish it.
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farcry11
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Post by farcry11 on Jul 12, 2014 7:05:14 GMT
You are correct! Cyberpunk has got to be one of my favorite genres, if not my total favorite, and some aspects of the story (such as Dean's "Cobra" weapon) are borrowed from works of Cyberpunk literature such as William Gibson's Sprawl Trilogy. I've been trying to emulate Cyberpunk in some of my more recent characters/stories.
Oh, and I finished Part 5, per your request.
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Post by Casperf1 on Jul 12, 2014 13:04:20 GMT
I'm currently reading Necromancer! I knew I recognized that Cobra weapon from somewhere. And let me tell you the style comes through really well. Awesome work.
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Post by Casperf1 on Jul 12, 2014 13:10:34 GMT
And lemme say. That throat-to-glass was pretty gruesome.
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Post by farcry11 on Jul 22, 2014 10:43:48 GMT
-PART 6: THE GREEN DRAGON-
Dean looked down at his PDA screen. The message from his contractor read simply: Hideo Ishikawa, 50,000 creds upon job completion. Dean furrowed his brow- Ishikawa, the feared Green Dragon of the Lowell underworld. He'd employed Dean in the past- an honorable man, in some regards, but ruthless nonetheless. On top of that, he led a considerably large gang of Yakuza. He was a very, very dangerous man to fuck with.
But the money was good... Hell. He'd do it, no questions asked. Dean set down his PDA on his apartment's coffee table, and walked to the nearby console desk. He palmed the computer's touchpad, and a holo screen popped up. Dean performed some motions with his hand, bringing up a black market search program called "Evil Eye". Dean spoke simply: "Eye, report on Hideo Ishikawa."
"Affirmative," the computer responded, and began sifting through residual SenseNet information on the man. Dean waited patiently, staring at the screen as lines of code popped up. After about a minute, the computer pinged.
"Data gathered. Subject's estimated value: 200,000,000 credits. Subject's aliases: Green Dragon. Subject's known haunts: Bamboo Garden Teahouse, Crystalite Dance Club, Shaxberd Theater of the Arts. Data retrieval end."
Dean mulled over the information some. It definitely gave him a lead or two... Bamboo Garden sounded promising. He'd stake it out a while, see what he could see.
--- 12 Hours Later ---
Dean sat on the roof of an apartment building adjacent the Teahouse, his Hovercycle parked beside him. Across his lap there lay a high caliber sniper rifle, in his hands a set of binoculars and a cup of coffee. He'd been watching the place for half a day now... It was late noon, and Hideo was bound to show up sooner or later. As Dean thought, he noticed a rather snazzy looking hovercar pull up to the Teahouse. He zoomed his binoc's in As some men exited the car...
It was him. And... Someone else. A tall man, maybe 6 feet, looking well muscled. He wore a black silk kimono over his street clothes, and a katana was strapped to his back. Hired help? A vassal? Dean didn't know, but he'd have to watch out.
In any case, he had a shot and he intended to take it. Quickly taking up his rifle, he aimed down the scope, centering the red blip on Hideo's head.
"C'mon..."
He fired. And then, the unthinkable happened. The big katana bastard moved, almost faster than Dean could follow, and practically cut the bullet out of the air with his sword. Dean, still looking through the scope, felt a chill run down his neck as the man seemed to look up at him. He knew he was there... While the Yakuza ran for cover, Katana sprinted towards Dean's apartment building.
The hitman cursed, affixed his rifle to his back, and bolted to his Hovercycle. He lifted off immediately, kicking it in to overdrive and getting the hell out of there. If he was dealing with someone like that freak, he needed a much better plan.
[W.I.P.]
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Post by Mr. Majestic on Jul 22, 2014 17:32:17 GMT
WAI DUS JERRY NEVA APPEAR ANYWHERE. I gotsta develop his character more. Dayum.
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